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You and I are in a small boat on rough water, you're a better swimmer than I am, there's only one life jacket, no one knows we're out there.


How are my chances?
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Posted - July 2, 2017

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  • 7126
    Not good. Shouldn't those be semicolons instead of commas?
      July 2, 2017 12:35 PM MDT
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  • 53502
    Nope, not at all.  They separate dependent clauses within the same sentence.  Commas are appropriate.

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      July 2, 2017 2:04 PM MDT
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  • 7126
    Figured if I was wrong you'd set me straight. You can have the life jacket.  ;-)
      July 2, 2017 2:34 PM MDT
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  • 44600
    How abut leaving out the 'am' and using an 'and' before no one?
      July 2, 2017 3:54 PM MDT
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  • 7126
    D'uh oh. You're poking the bear. 
      July 2, 2017 4:14 PM MDT
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  • 53502
    ~
      July 2, 2017 6:16 PM MDT
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  • 7126
    Quite feisty. 
      July 2, 2017 6:22 PM MDT
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  • 53502

    Element, prior to posting it, I tweaked it several times and in several combinations in order to keep it succinct and within the character limit allowed.  The very recommendations you've made were part of the choices I played with before arriving at the final draft.  The result that you see above is still grammatically correct even though your suggestions would have been also.  If you think it should have or could have been posted differently, I encourage you to post your own questions in the way you see fit.

    Thanks anyway.
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    This post was edited by Randy D at July 2, 2017 6:39 PM MDT
      July 2, 2017 5:55 PM MDT
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  • 17592
    Randy they should be semis.  Those clauses are independent.  They each have a complete thought and each have a subject and verb.  Not one of them depends on another clause to form a sentence. 

      July 3, 2017 2:45 PM MDT
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  • 13071
    Good. You can have the life jacket, but only if I can have your hat too. Then when your through with them, I can ask you to take your hate and jack it off. ;+
      July 2, 2017 12:45 PM MDT
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  • 10026
    I've figured it out!!  You and LyricalOne must get together and write a comedy act.  You both are really quick on the draw and funny :)  Happy! Happy!  You guys could make a mint!  Don and I could be your agents.  Hollywood is just around the corner!!
      July 2, 2017 4:37 PM MDT
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  • 44600
    Why thank you, my funny little hatted one.
      July 2, 2017 5:36 PM MDT
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  • 13071
    Hahahahahah ;D
      July 2, 2017 8:37 PM MDT
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  • 5614
    Good, you take the life jacket, get out and I take the boat :)
      July 2, 2017 12:47 PM MDT
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  • 53502

    Hey, wait . . . 
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      July 2, 2017 2:05 PM MDT
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  • You get the life jacket...that's obvious and 
      July 2, 2017 1:19 PM MDT
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  • 10026
    And... and what Judas?  I'm hanging on like a good barnacle would to find out what happens!  And... what?  You haunt him?  POW!  You pop him?  You let him live happily ever after?  Am I missing the obvious? What Judas, what?! ;)
      July 2, 2017 4:54 PM MDT
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  • Fill in the blanks. LOL
      July 2, 2017 5:01 PM MDT
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  • 10026
    Bouncing with giggles so much I'm rockin' the boat!!  :) :)
      July 2, 2017 5:04 PM MDT
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  • 53502
    Merlin, don't just sit there laughing!  Why don't you do something to HELP ME?


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      July 2, 2017 6:34 PM MDT
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  • 46117
    I'm one of these.  I cannot live if someone else has to forfeit their life for me.  I have a conscience that will make me miserable for the rest of my life if I did that.  So, you are safe.

      July 2, 2017 1:56 PM MDT
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  • 53502

    Thank you, my friend.




    (NOT reported.)
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      July 2, 2017 2:08 PM MDT
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  • 46117



    That, and the fact that I don't want to pay later. 


      July 2, 2017 2:12 PM MDT
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  • 8214
    It is yours, without hesitation. 
      July 2, 2017 2:30 PM MDT
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