Have you ever been funct? Did you need to get defunked?

Nice little poem.

Thanks for your kindness, Ele.

Personally, I don't see it as a poem, because it lacks sound-play, metaphor, lateral thinking and emotional resonance.

Something closer to a half-way decent poem is this one I wrote about a year ago...

If to write is to swim in surf…

If poetry is the beach of an infinite ocean,

I have dipped my toes in the edges of waves,

but not yet learned to swim.

 

I fear the undertow,

the wave that turns me in somersaults,

dashes my head against the sand,

and leaves me stunned.

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I quite often divide long sentences into enjambed lines, not to make them poetry, but to make it easier for the reader to grok the sense.
It started when I was emailing with an acquaintance who had a limit to how far his eyes could scan a line - ten words.
Something about the rhythm of it appealed to me - not always exactly ten, but following the feel of the language.
Probably a better way to do it would be to write much shorter sentences - but then it wouldn't express the way it sounds to me in my mind.
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I've been blogging a few poems lately, if you'd be interested. :) This post was edited by inky at August 10, 2019 2:45 PM MDT